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I

  saw the sun rise in your eyes.
  I also saw it set when the tears
  came flooding in the moment
  we said goodbye, the moment
  we both

Want

  -ed to find ourselves in the endless
  dunes of what we have made
  of ourselves. Somehow, I think
  we were fools

To

  indulge in our feelings so easily.
  We were like children deprived
  of chocolate.

Spend

  -ing time with you was joy.
  What we had was something that

My

  heart would remember throughout this

Lifetime.

  I just wish that I could spend
  every waking moment

Loving

  you. Kissing

You
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~TheIcey-Love Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
When i first read this, i could see so much depth into the emotions portraied, but i also sense some slight, subtle contradictions to oneself, like with the words "somehow i think we were fools etc etc". But i believe thats exactly how the heart sees the end of love, and the midst of love aswell. The best feeling that couldnt be defined with only the word "love", and is mourned for and yearned for so passionately at its end. And yet is thought of as "foolish" when remembered, as you said, but is still something that you only wish you could hold on to tighter.

well thats what my interpretation is but yeah :) beautiful piece
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!Aysleth Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll tell you a story if you don't mind. hehe
I had my 'first love' when i was 13 haha young I know. He was also 13 and we became bf-gf sorta but it lasted only for two weeks. I really really liked him...even until now and I'm already 20. It was foolish that I engaged myself in a relationshit at such a young age but i do wish i could see him again..talk to him maybe score a kiss haha sometimes at night..i think of him and it makes me restless and i don't understand why. it's just like i love him but i think of us as a joke.

You know..I can't interpret my poems. I just write then when a comment like this..which i appreciate very much..turns up. that's when i realize why i wrote what i wrote.

Thank you :) sorry for the babble..hehe
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~TheIcey-Love Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's an interesting story ^^ fits the piece well and your welcome
Keep writing :)
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:iconaysleth:
!Aysleth Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. I'll keep on writing. :D
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~TheIcey-Love Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
good :)
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!Aysleth Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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:iconbelltail:
I challenge you to a cute emoticons war!!! *war cry*

:cling: :cuddle: :huggle: :hug: :kiss:
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:iconaysleth:
!Aysleth Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Challenge accepted! :jarksaber:

:mangapunksai: :hesitation: :brushteeth: :lmao: :popcorn: :w00t!: :bump: :wave:
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